English Critique

So, a peer review of blogs we have here.

Regan Shuppe

Your blogs represent the classy and funny style of writing we all wish we had. Seriously, the majority of what I read on these blog posts comes from you. When you write, you automatically gather the attention of your audience and pull them in with a funny or articulate statement, whether or not we actually care about the topic.

However, your style of writing can get carried away and mislead. You could even possibly offend somebody, but I would still probably laugh. For example: post 11A starts out with what may seem to be a sarcastic statement regarding the writing process and our progression. I thought it was funny, somebody else, maybe not.

Nelson:

Your blog posts are what i would recommend anyone read right of the bat. Why? Because there fluid and give the reader what they need to know.

Even though you have the first step down, it sounds to generic and original. Its like reading the first article we read on story grammars this semester.

Laycee:

Your blog posts are very basic. You get straight to the point and then its over. There isn't anything wrong about this but neither is there much right.

Like i said before, very basic. Why not elaborate more? Take it to the next step and write about something more intrinsic or extrinsic, giving things the detail they need to, well, stand-out. Just write more basically.

Important Tools In Writing.

What I believe is the most important tool or tools, for that matter, are story grammars and the element of cause and effect. Simply put, without these writers don't really have a story, they have children's story book. Story grammars such as the setting itself tell the audience where the story takes place and what time period these events happened. Characters inside a story give the essay meaning, they keep the audience interested and their just plain old vital to whatever your writing about. The plot is the sequence of events that the characters are involved in and the theme mashes it all together in to something important the writer wants to express. As you can see, this is why the presence of story grammars is needed for anything writers plan on writing about.

The other important element needed to be grasped is the concept of cause and effect action. Has anyone ever seen a movie without this element or better yet a story? Probably not, and unless something goes horribly wrong with the writing process today then writer never will. Cause and effect seems to create a low point, middle point, and high point, climax, and conclusion to the story. This concept, used over and over again, is the backbone to creating an interest in an audience anyone is trying to attract.

Systematic Process Of Writing

Writing an essay is simply the process of systematically putting your concepts together and writing about them. You start by brainstorming about your topic, then take and hour or two expressing your thoughts on paper. Now that you have your ideas out on paper you can put them into a particular order pertaining to the main topic. Inside, the body should contain story grammars with a cause and effect story line to give the characters meaning and importance. Once the body of the paper is finished you can begin to write the introduction and conclusion to the paper. Peer review is next and should be read by someone other than yourself.  Once the paper is finished being edited, the paper should be read by writer out loud. This allows the writer to notice any wordy sentences.  Finally, the paper is ready for submission or for an audience. 

Definition of Classification and Division.

Classification and division use is vital to the life and importance of almost an essay. When there is nothing besides a main point, a measly introduction and conclusion, along with little to no detail, we get an unstructured, sub par paper. Adding classification and division in your essay will inevitably give it what it needs. You start out by identify the main concept and parts, break them down into sub categories, then go even farther in depth to give the reader understanding. If you can write with this component, undoubtedly, the reader will for comprehension and understanding with your paper.  

Reaching the Audience: 3 Definitions

Three definitions that can used to reach the audience in this case are Welfare, drug tests, and tax payers money.
Welfare in short, can be summed up by saying that it is to help the needy in times of unemployment and hard times. It includes checks for food, unemployment, home heating assistance and many others.
Drug tests can be summarized into a pass or fail category, or maybe into another extreme. People getting tested were required to take part because they need government aid and help to get through the rough times they were having.
Tax payers money are the many individuals that work for their money,then have that taken out of their checks for use with government aid programs, etc. The tax payers would more likely want to see people in need that are deserving of these programs.

Definitions and There Importance in Reaching an Audience.

           As we have talked about many times before, reaching your audience is important for the life and "grade" of your essay. We have added many elements to them so far to give us a structured essay but now were adding yet another structured element. The element is definitions. When adding definitions to the essay we give it more importance and structure, outlining the ideas for the reader, to give them a better understanding and fluidity to the writing. With this added element the reader will then have a clearer idea as to what the author is writing about or trying to get across.
          Article from the New York Times: States Adding Drug Tests as Hurdle for Welfare.
http://www.nytimes.com/2011/10/11/us/states-adding-drug-test-as-hurdle-for-welfare.html?_r=1&ref=us
          The article discusses why they are doing this, who is doing it and then evidence/results is given on the subject pertaining to the topic. Inside the story we read that many families on welfare had to submit a drug test to the state to continue receiving monthly aid. IF you passed there was no issue, if you failed then you would be put on an abuse hotline and revoked a second chance for a year. If you decided to receive state help for the drug abuse then you could reapply in 6 months. If you happened to fail while having children in your house, you would still be denied aid. It would instead be sent to another family member for use with the children. In conclusion, there are mixed feelings within the government as to whether this is a good time to have this law, due to the hard economic times.

How Do You See It?

With all the digital media out there we put less emphasis on words v.s. visual things. Sometimes when listening or reading text we take it out of context, but with a picture next to it we may see it different. This technically means we are inadequate in understanding visual literacy. However, we tend to be more visual and feel as we are witness's because of all the available material to us. Why is this?
Terms discussed in class can explain to us why we think this way.

Master Narratives: these are rooted deeply in culture and context. Master narratives are powerful and enduring stories within particular countries, regions, cultures, or groups. They arise from the rich social heritage of particular communities and settings, and reflect shared hopes, concerns, and aspirations.

 Persuasive Themes: persuasive themes come to life through visual content: the people, places, and things employed within a specific visual message. They are also augmented and enhanced by technical factors and choices such as lighting, camera angles, and music that help position the content, set the mood, and reinforce the image.

Audience Resonance & Effects: these have indicators that vary in strength and directness. Indicators of audience exposure, for example, center on general media access data and try to ascertain who potentially may have received a message in the first place. Indicators of resonance and attitudinal effect involve evidence of “buzz” and observed sentiment, while indicators of behavioral effect focus on observed audience reactions or, if reactions are unattainable, reports and commentary reference salient actions or behaviors that could be associated with exposure to a given piece of visual media.

Compare and Contrast: you compare things that are alike and contrast differences between to two items (pictures).

Windows of Opportunity: Gaps that may be filled in by other stories, new stories, and perspectives omitted from or slighted in the original narrative and that these gaps may impact the human tendency to finish what is perceived as incomplete.